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苏州新东方2月27号雅思大作文点评

作者:邹艳萍    来源:苏州新东方学校

Some people hold that technological progress in the last 100 years has brought negative effects upon society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

本文是科技发展的利弊问题的探讨。题干是agree or disagree, 即观点类。要求考生在第一段明确表明观点。

首段:两句话

1 转述原文

Recent decades have brought with it a burst of technological discoveries and inventions that revolutionized a great many industries. Meanwhile, technological progress, opponents argue, has inevitably exerted negative influence on our society.

2 我的观点

To the best of my knowledge, scientific advancement, despite its undesirable effect, has brought us more benefits.

中间段: 三段(两段积极影响,一段消极影响)

Pro:

1,从时间角度考虑

1)     P:Technological development has facilitated our life.

For example, in the past visitors in China had to spend several days travelling to the United States by ship. But years later, with the invention of air planes, it takes tourists no more than 15 hours on average.

2,从文化角度角度入手

2)     P:In the third place, science and technology actually help to preserve the useful and pleasant parts of traditional culture.

Take the celebration of the Chinese Lantern Festival for example. Lanterns are now designed with modern technology and materials to make them more attractive, and they are powered by electricity, which is safer than candles.

Therefore, supported by modern technology, this traditional Chinese festival is now enjoying growing popularity not only among the Chinese but also many foreign friends.

3 Con: 从身心健康角度看

3)P:Technological growth has actually threatened the physical soundness of the public.

Take the example of my mom as an example. (来源于学生Lily)

Decades before, her working place was quite far from home, up to about 4 miles. Due to the lack of modern vehicles, every day, she would ride on her bicycle to get to work and rode back in the evening. The total miles she covered would be 8 miles and the total time she spent was usually 2 hours per day. In that case, she maintained healthy in the past.

Unfortunately, with the fast development of modern technology, she could now rely on one of its products, namely, automobiles to travel to and from workplace. Nevertheless, her physical condition deteriorates in recent years due to lack of exercise.

Noteworthy is the fact that thousands of people are suffering from the same disaster all around the world owing to various technological inventions. (升华一下这个例子)

结尾:两句话

1重述观点

To sum up, I am convinced, after taking the above points into account, that the merits of technological development far outweigh its demerits.

2 提出建议

Therefore, it is strongly recommended that we further encourage its progress while alert the public to its potential danger.

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